I want YOUR Suggestions

Feast your eyes, ladies and gents! Didn't read it so...

FINE! Here's a link to a little blog i rushed to make so you could read it.
Read at your own risk.
C+C Please.

ajkldfjasd you seriously did not just make a blog for this.

Tell me you didn't.

Man SP, remind me to buy you a beer

It's okay.

HEY WHAT THE HECK! >:(
Great, now i'm going to get banned because you put up my peice of crap "script"...thanks. >:l

This post has been edited by Adan on Aug 24 2006, 01:15 AM

If you're going to post it on the forums. You're going to post it on the forums.

you haven't quite grasped the personlaties. Thats the only thing ive spotted from the lines I can be bothered to read.

And that's why i'm re-doing it. It will be better and more like South Park then When Harry Met Sally.

Not that anyone in their right mind is going to ban you because of your limited writing skills but does posting it within a zip or linking to it on a blog make it okay?

If so we could have been linking each other to porn this whole time.

This post has been edited by SonicProject on Aug 24 2006, 01:21 AM

You're not going to get banned for posting the script but I have to wonder why you would post it if you're so convinced that it's crap.

In all honesty I couldn't finish reading it because the very notion of doing so makes me want to disembowel myself with a spork.

But seriously, it needs some work. In fact, I suggest not using the South Park label. At all. Matt Stone and Trey Parker hold advanced degrees in writing, film, and mathematics, and what are you, 14? There are even several grammatical mistakes in the transcript which make me think that you haven't even proof read it. That's strike one. Also, your script is void of any real cleverness or humor. Most of the plot seems boring and colorless (at first glance) and while I may not be a big fan of South Park, I am aware that the creators of the show do a little more than just stick in potty language for little giggles from the incremental child audience that watches the show. Take some writing classes, learn to write witty dialogue, and return to this project in several years - I can safely see that it's not something you can handle. =/

you also needs to describe the setting a little more too. I got lost. D:

limited writing skills.....i take that as an INSULT.

ORLY? You want to see more than just toilet humor? What then, racial slur, blood and gore? Alright then.... AAnd yes i realize my writing is worth ****. That's why i was held back in the 5th grade... they THOUGHT i had no potential, they destroyed my life and now ihere i am two years later being mauled just like at the parent - teacher conference.

This post has been edited by Adan on Aug 24 2006, 01:25 AM

You called your script "crap" first, buddy.

No. It doesn't matter how many controversial subjects you compile into the script. There's barely any execution.

And yeah, Adan, don't rib on SP because he critiqued your writing skills. If you disregard everybody's criticism then I honestly don't see what juncture he can turn to aside from being frank.

This post has been edited by Gyiyg Strikes Back! on Aug 24 2006, 01:26 AM

I was actually planningon having a scene where they piss on a house and make a mural out of **** but... that might not be SUTABLE for some people. Like me being short. THAT'S NOT RIGHT to some people.... I try and try to be a decent and respectful human being and what do i get in return? NOTHING. I've lived in nothing but shacks worth crap, my mom's single trying to get by in life, my father has been used my numerous females, my uncles who i once idolised now smoke pot, my grandmother lost 2 husbands to drugsand suicide, and i am RIDICULED and even attacked at school on a daily basis, and yet i try to act as if nothing is wrong... I used to think of this place as a community where i could escape from the trauma of my families history....but uh that's all but died. My life may not be THAT bad but some parts of it....... fkiehfksajsak

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This post has been edited by Adan on Aug 24 2006, 01:33 AM

What the hell are you talking about now? This makes me think your plea for "suggestions" was just a ploy for attention.

Not to mention it's not even remotely funny or worth the effort, Adan.

As for your recently updated post, Adan...that seems pretty irrelevent and those are much more serious issues than the completion of a South Park movie.