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art critic was here, tri is a loser!, fifty six kay

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Posted: Sep 14 2009, 05:58 AM

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QUOTE (Salad @ Sep 14 2009, 12:59 AM)

The full body is alright for the most part, just pretty scratchy and messy looking, looks like you kind of just went "whatever" on the hands. I ... don't really get the outfit either, honestly. The design's just ugly to me.
I'm going to use some harsh words because I know you draw gud and are capable of being better, so bear/bare (whatever) with me here.
The profile head is a monstrosity, but so is most profile views when people first draw them. The head is too "flat" and smashed in, it should be more something like this. (Forgive me, I haven't drawn in a long time)
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The facial features on the front head itself is mostly fine (Those are some huge lips though) and personally I would have the eyes a tiny bit larger. The biggest problems here though is the hairline(I think that's what it's called, the part on the forehead where the hair from your scalp starts) is much too low. A lot of people have hair styles where you don't see much of the forehead so we are used to that, but in your case the bangs go up first, so it really shouldn't be that low. The neck is also rather thick and long (weird stylistic combination, it's usually one or the other) but overall I think this would be fixed with a little more care. I just get the impression that you're not really trying, since many parts of the picture conflict as they're so uneven at times.
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In your picture, the neck is sort of a tube that just extends up, but there's a bit of a slant from the skin/muscle/whatever that smooths it out, it's probably why it looks so weird.

Sorry if I sound condescending, because I totally don't mean it. Keep it up, and I hope you find something that's comfortable for you soon.

No it's ok, I'm alright with everything you're saying cuz it makes sense, and in retrospect I suppose it is kind of a sloppy job.

Really appreciate the crit, though. I'm not giving up on this style because I know it can be good when done right.

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a more suitable ref (sunglasses not compulsory!)

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