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Sprite Comic: Quest of a Name, Tring hard not to be Chao Tonight.

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Glaber	Posted: Oct 14 2005, 04:54 PM
Regular Group: Members Posts: 363 Member No.: 565 Joined: 18-August 04 Status: (0d)	Strip 1 This would be my second attempt at a sprite comic with the first going down hill. Any comments or critisims would be welcome. This post has been edited by Glaber on Oct 16 2005, 10:42 AM

Techokami	Posted: Oct 14 2005, 07:33 PM
Quit Stalin! Group: MFGG Security Ninja Posts: 7507 Member No.: 30 Joined: 13-October 03 Status: (0d)	Author character, poor font choices, NO backgrounds, special effects are just drawn lines (what the hell is that supposed to mean?), Megaman character edit, Sonic character edit, failed humor... Yup. Generic sprite comic. Read all the scathing reviews here to get some ideas as to how you can fix it up. --------------------

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OmegaK	Posted: Oct 14 2005, 11:49 PM
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QUOTE (TechWolf @ Oct 14 2005, 07:33 PM)

Author character, poor font choices, NO backgrounds, special effects are just drawn lines (what the hell is that supposed to mean?), Megaman character edit, Sonic character edit, failed humor...
Yup. Generic sprite comic. Read all the scathing reviews here to get some ideas as to how you can fix it up.

After having listened to CJ rant and ***** at people mindlessly on the old FB20XL forums when Psy fired his ass for "premeditated evil" behind the scenes on FB20XL, I've learned not to trust anything on an Aftervision website as most of the people there are whiny hardasses anyway.

But Glaber, about the comic, it's not very good to tell you the truth. You pretty much need all of what Techwolf suggested you add in order to make it a little better.

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Glaber	Posted: Oct 16 2005, 10:43 AM
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QUOTE (TechWolf @ Oct 14 2005, 05:33 PM)

Author character

If executed properly this will not flaw a sprite comic at all.

Unfortunately most sprite comics try to cash in on the "humor value" of having the author in it, making everyone ask him everytime anything happens and / or hate him.

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Posted: Oct 16 2005, 11:04 AM

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QUOTE (Draco Icebane @ Oct 16 2005, 10:52 AM)

I actually have plans for this author character involving his powers

Suigi	Posted: Oct 16 2005, 02:31 PM
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Glaber	Posted: Oct 16 2005, 02:34 PM
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Posted: Oct 16 2005, 04:40 PM

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QUOTE (Glaber @ Oct 16 2005, 12:04 PM)

I actually have plans for this author character involving his powers

That's the other major no-no for author characters. Giving them god-like power.

Also your second strip isn't too much better, at least it has a BG, but with bittage mix.
EDIT: Might as well link you to the commandments of sprite comics: http://www.fragile-minds.com/crashnbass/donts.html

This post has been edited by TechWolf on Oct 16 2005, 05:47 PM

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Glaber	Posted: Oct 16 2005, 06:26 PM
Regular Group: Members Posts: 363 Member No.: 565 Joined: 18-August 04 Status: (0d)	Read them already. along with the comic series on the site.

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